Tuesday, January 23, 2007

Scream!!!!!!!!

Her eyes were a deathly still
Her voice, unheard of
Unless it were the screams
When she saw little children
Little innocent babies they were
But she shrieked aloud - a banshee
Until you were deaf from the noise
They thought her to be insane
A poor loony whom war had made thus



But only she knew the real truth
Oh how she missed her dear baby
And how much she loved her little child
And how vividly she remembered that Night
The loud footsteps, the terrifying gunshots,
The banging on the door, the hiding-pronto,
The murmured whispers, the stifled cry
Of her baby, a little too stifling
And now she always screamed when she saw babies


------- Shilpa Krishnan

21 comments:

nivi said...

hey good one di..
oh ya.. one more thing.. u r "very much" ready to become a moommy!!;)

and where is the other post of urs?

lookwhosback said...

@nivi: thankoo...and why the issue of me being ready to become a "moommy"??
which, btw, i am not yet ready to become!!! the other post is still in the making...

nivi said...

chumma di... the whole poem abt she missing her child and the love she had for her child was very nicely told...(kudos to u!)

and i am very serious... when i read it first i thought that mom had written this one coz it had all the ingredients how a mom will feel... awesome one babe!

Hii....welcome back to the human world said...

Too high level a language used,
Took me nearly a day and a half,
To get to the meaning of wat u released,
Thy wordings forced me to reach my shelf.

Now forcing me to doubt,
...about the li'l amount of brains i hav,
still retaining the confidence in me
....an engineer that i am.

Regardin my identity,
Did release out a few clues,
Each line of ur's screwed me up,
So revenge's on the cards.

Hii....welcome back to the human world said...

....hey..i need ur comments on this work of mine!

anywayz...did like the way u presented ur poem(...if it was not a copy-paste edition).

lookwhosback said...

@nivi: thanks di...i am truly honoured :)

@hii...welcome back to the human world: still clueless about your identity sir..and thakoo for the comment on my poem...urs was a commendable effort too...maybe you should start a blog of your own

Red Machine said...

To- WELCOME BACK TO THE HUMAN WORL
How he tries
to impress the maiden
poems he writes
to blow her over
but little does he know
that thers a worl out her
be a man
if u are
shout out your name
and end the game..
Avi

Red Machine said...

Hey shil nice to see you tryin out new genres...Keep it goin gal...Please tell me that the baby escaped.

nivi said...

hey shill... little bit of clues have come da..

nivi said...

someone is trying to bowl u over;) ...

kinni said...

hello!
I dont get poetry at all..but i really liked the way u wrote this one...abt my blog..thanx! will keep chking ur blog...

kinni

Hii....welcome back to the human world said...

To- Red Machine

The maiden's not yet impressed i guess,
so hav to go on wid probably this mess,
n me a person who prefers beatin around the bush,
so....better not get into this particular rush!

Red Machine said...

Maybe da maiden aint impressd
but dis lad surely is
so if u can change ur preferences
a gala time it is for us
we cud sing together
or even murder for money
but at the end of the day
youll still want the maiden.
Shill may be her name
but shrill is her voice
and kill do her eyes
so will you stop being weird
and just chill with your name.


Who are you ?

Sridhar Krishna said...

Shilpa, you are awesome!

Hii....welcome back to the human world said...

...awesome was the attempt,
but unwilling to change,
prefer to be a hidden truth,
happy wid it that i am.

shil might be the name,
n being 'shrill' is for u,
for me its an ol' friend,
a very 'hi' makes me thrill.

can i know ur original name,
now dat u die hard for fame,
leave me alone,
n...jus be gone.

Hii....welcome back to the human world said...

n hey Mr. machine....y is it dat u r so interested in finding out who i am??
r u appointed for it(...by her) or is it a selfish motive??
sorry to say so...but dats wat i felt.
if she wants...she will find....i hope u understand....k

nivi said...

hey there is a poem competition going on in the comments section....
tell me that u r the judge!:) lol...

lookwhosback said...

@Red machine: thanks da..and your poetry is pretty impressive as well...you must consider writing some serious poetry for a change..

@nivi: dunno about the bowling over bit and goodness knows who's the judge..all i can say that i am a silent, amused spectator

@kinni:thankoo :)

@hii...welcome back to the human world: I did not set up Mr.Red machine to find out your identity. i am just waiting for you to reveal it yourself.

lookwhosback said...

@sridhar krishna: thanks da..

nivi said...

@ Hii....welcome back to the human world said...
i jus have one thing to say... u better disclose ur identity as soon as possible... enough of this game! now its bloddy borin!

Red Machine said...

Hey welcome bk:
Relax dude Im not here to snatch your girl away or anyhting. Looks like sum1 s really serious about something . i am not dyin for fame either and Shil pretty well knows who this is.Anyways twas nice singing to you . God Bless.
Hey Shill can we have more posts please.